Bài mẫu IELTS Writing Task 1 #24 [Table]

Bài mẫu được viết bởi Callum Nguyen và được đánh giá/cho điểm bởi thầy Peter Wright, cựu giám khảo IELTS với 25 năm kinh nghiệm với BC và IDP. Ghé thăm blog của thầy tại Total – IELTS 

The table describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.

The provided table illustrates the number of workers and factories in two countries between 1851 and 1901.

It is noticeable that the number of total employees witnessed a downward trend while the opposite was true for that of factories. Also, the figures for male workers were almost always higher than those for females.

In 1851, there were 287010 male workers employed, compared to only 190000 female counterparts. The number of male employees dropped significantly to 131781 in 1861 and continued to decrease to the lowest point of 31.000 over the next 4 decades. Similarly, the figure for female employment had declined dramatically to 30.000 by 1901.

There was a considerable drop in the number of total workers in both genders between 1851 and 1901, from 400.000 to only 61.000. Regarding factories, there were 225 working facilities in England and Wales in 1851. The quantity of factories reached a peak of 727 a decade later before experiencing a decrease to 622 in 1871. Eventually, the figure stood at 600 at the end of the period.

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Overall a very good answer. Clear structure.

TASK ACHIEVEMENT:  8

COHERENCE & COHESION: 8

LEXICAL RESOURCES : 8

GRAMMATICAL RANGE & ACCURACY : 8

The report was written by Callum Nguyen and the feedback was given by Mr. Peter Wright, an ex-examiner with 25+ years of experience. Visit his blog at Total – IELTS 

Bài mẫu được viết bởi Callum Nguyen và được đánh giá/cho điểm bởi thầy Peter Wright, cựu giám khảo IELTS với 25 năm kinh nghiệm với BC và IDP. Ghé thăm blog của thầy tại Total – IELTS 

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